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本期小作文供稿:
章 跃
题源:剑桥真题集11的30页(六个饼)
高分范文及解析
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信息分组:根据用水目的分组:
✔ Agricultural Use: North America & Europe VS the other four regions
✔ Industrial Use: North America & Europe VS the other four regions
组1和组2呈现出相反关系,于是再合并。
Domestic Use: North America, South America, and Europe VS the other three regions
然后,写作内容的顺序就根据信息分组来。
Introduction 略
Body:
先总写格局/趋势(不带数值)→ In North America and Europe, water is used mainly for manufacturing and other production← 注意词汇:题目中的 industrial use被替换, and this situation is just the opposite of the situation in the other four regions, where water is used mainly for agricultural use. ← 把分组1和分组2都带进去写了。然后,写突出的具体数值 → Industrial production consumes as much as roughly half of North America’s and Europe’s respective total water usage, and the usage by the agricultural sector accounts for one-third or slightly more. In the other four regions, the agricultural use of water is between the minimum of 71 percent (South America) and the maximum of 88 percent (Central Asia), and the industrial use of water is divided, 大家的写作习惯是用定语从句介绍数值,其实可以用状语从句引出数值作为语法亮点 → as its percentage is below 10 in Africa and Central Asia and around 10 in South America and Southeast Asia.
In terms of the household use ← 注意词汇:题目中的domestic use被替换, South America is particularly noteworthy, 用状语从句引出数值作为语法亮点 → as almost one-fifth of the total water used is for this purpose. This figure is higher, to different extents, than the ones in other five regions.
注意全文中句子主语(方框斜体)的多样。
Conclusion 略