《剑13》Test 4大作文范文 | 全球人口饥饿的原因
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本期大作文供稿:
章跃
最终审稿:
陈赫
Chris Allen
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《剑13》Test 4 大作文解析及范文
In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?
这!是一个不频繁的指令类型(提问形式)。由于不需要选边站,所以这个题目的论证逻辑不难;但是,话题本身有那么丢丢难度。
(谢谢为本篇范文的TR做出贡献的柳xy同学)
高分范文
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Despite [“尽管”,介词,后面接名词] the development of agriculture, famine still exists globally. This miserable situation happens for at least a couple of reasons; however, fortunately, it does not have to persist [(顽固地)存在,不及物动词].
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The first reason is that [名词性从句作表语-表语从句] although farming and breeding have developed, the prices of agricultural products have not accordingly been reduced to affordable levels. It is not farmers to blame. As a matter of fact, after a harvest is reaped, it is collected by traders before shoppers can choose the produce [“农产品”] on the shelves of markets. Those intermediary businesses [“中间商”], including retailers[“零售商”] , raise the prices to profitable [“有利润的”]levels that are often too high. Another reason is the inaccessibility of some areas. The inconvenience transport renders these areas out of reach of modern vehicles, and therefore, foodstuff cannot arrive where it is needed.
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One solution, in response to [“应对于”] the first reason above, is to regulate food prices and make basic foodstuff affordable for all people. For example, legislators [“立法者”] could intervene in [“介入干预”(褒义)]the pricing process and curtail the profits that may be excessive [“过度的”]. If [“如果”,条件状语从句] food prices could drop to reasonable levels, every household would afford enough food to feed every mouth. Another solution, to the second reason above, is to develop transportation. Since [“因为/既然”,引导原因状语从句] some regions whose food supply depends on imports may not have proper infrastructures [“基础设施”]of transport, such as roads, rail lines or airports, facilities must be constructed to ensure food delivery.
[主体两个段落的核心/高频语法/句型点:状语从句]
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In conclusion, although agriculture has been progressing [“进步/进展”,不及物], many people, around the world, still starve. A minimum of two reasons can account for [“解释”] this phenomenon, and two corresponding solutions are proposed.
[良心话:最后这一句套话结尾不精彩却好安全也很省时间]