专项练习 | 高考英语读后续写能力提升训练：我是如何克服阅读障碍？

#原文呈现

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

One day when I was 12, my mother gave me an order: I was to walk to the public library, and borrow at least one book for the summer. This was one more weapon for her to defeat my strange problem — inability to read.

In the library, I found my way into the“Children’s Room.” I sat down on the floor and pulled a few books off the shelf at random. The cover of a book caught my eye. It presented a picture of a beagle. I had recently had a beagle, the first and only animal companion I ever had as a child. He was my secret sharer, but one morning, he was gone, given away to someone who had the space and the money to care for him. I never forgot my beagle.

There on the book’s cover was a beagle which looked identical to my dog. I ran my fingers over the picture of the dog on the cover. My eyes ran across the title, Amos, the Beagle with a Plan. Unknowingly, I had read the title. Without opening the book, I borrowed it from the library for the summer.

Under the shade of a bush, I started to read about Amos. I read very, very slowly with difficulty. Though pages were turned slowly, I got the main idea of the story about a dog who, like mine, had been separated from his family and who finally found his way back home. That dog was my dog, and I was the little boy in the book. At the end of the story, my mind continued the final scene of reunion, on and on, until my own lost dog and I were, in my mind, running together. When I finished my reading, a stream of tears ran down my checks. It was until then I realized that I have overcome my inability to read. Thus, this was the very first book for me which I had read through and deeply immersed in real sense.

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语；

3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。

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My mother’s call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something:

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Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature.

#思维路径

01

核心内容

文本主要内容为：故事中的“我”从小患有阅读障碍，某年暑假，母亲鼓励“我”必须完成一本书的阅读，于是“我”便去图书馆寻找读物，偶然间，“我”发现了一本故事书，该书的封面上是一只猎犬，这让“我”想起了自己曾经养过的小狗。在兴趣的驱使下，我成功的读完了整本书，克服了阅读障碍。

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写作思路

（1）明确故事人物关系（characters）。故事中主要人物为患有阅读障碍的“我”和“我”的母亲。

（2）理清故事主要事件(events)。故事主人公“我”患有阅读障碍，主人公的母亲为了让他克服这个障碍要求他暑假必须完成一本书的阅读，于是“我”便去图书馆借书，一本关于猎犬的书引起了主人公的兴趣，他想起了自己曾经的宠物，最后主人公成功看完了整本书克服了他的阅读障碍。

（3）根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展（development）。故事总体的发展应该是主人公“我”开始对阅读产生兴趣，每个礼拜都会去图书馆借书看书，并且一直到大学他也从未停止过对阅读的热爱，毕业后“我”拿到了文学博士学位，并且成为了一名作家。续写第一段：“我”开始热爱上了阅读，在母亲的鼓励下，我每天坚持去图书馆阅读各类书籍，并且我也尝试着自己去写一些故事，到了大学，“我”主修文学，对阅读的热爱丝毫不减。续写第二段：“我”成功拿到了文学博士的学位，母亲为我感到骄傲，并且“我”也找到了人生的方向，即成为一名作家，而这一切完全归功于那一年暑假我读的第一本书。

（4）结合下划线词罗列写作要点（points）。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“Did he overcome his inability to read? Did he go on reading? What was the influence of the first book?”等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What would happened after he got his PhD in literature? Why would he choose literature as his major? What would he do for his future career? And how did it related to his very first book?等”

#参考范文

My mother’s call returned me to the real world. I suddenly realized something: Books could be incredibly wonderful and I was going to read them. From then on, I kept going to the library more often. In the library, I was exposed to different types of books: detective stories, love stories, poems, fables and so on. My mother encouraged me to spend time doing my favorite thing. Day by day, I was finally succeed in overcoming my inability to read. Moreover, I began to write some stories by myself. When I went to the university, I chose literature as my major.

Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature. I never told my mother about my “miraculous” experience that summer. It was the very first book that made me what I am today. This year, I began writing my first book carried the topic of my beagle. I hope it could be my lifelong career. The power of the words has held. （174words）

范文解析

范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。第一段写了“我”在母亲的鼓励之下，一直坚持不懈的阅读，在图书馆里接触不同类型的各类书籍，最终完全的克服了阅读障碍，本着对阅读的热爱，“我”在大学将文学作为主修。第二段，我成功获得文学博士学位，并且成为了一名作家，开始了第一本书的写作，而“我”的第一本书正是关于我的猎犬，与上文对我人生产生影响的第一本书交相呼应，符合故事发展的逻辑，升华了主题。

#提炼归纳

01

展开充分想象

续写有助于培养想象力，但是想象力贵在合理。这个“理”指的就是生活的逻辑性。续写部分不应该游离开头部分，应该是开头部分的顺理成章的发展。如文中第二段所给开头写到Last year, my mother was so proud that his son was rewarded a PhD in literature. 以首句为前提，进行合理的想象，即“我”在毕业之后，开始了我的写作生涯，并且成为了一名作家，这符合文中发展，又充满了丰富的想象，使得文章成为了一个有机的整体。

02

注意前后照应

续写要注意前后照应，防止自相矛盾。特别是给出开头的续写，必须要与上文紧密联系，使上下文融为一体。如文章前面提到“我”所读的第一本书对“我”的意义非同小可，所以在续写中，“我”开始了一本书的写作，而第一本书的主题刚好就是关于“我”的曾经养过的猎犬，与前文相互照应。

#写作演练一

1.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

It was 1st January, the first day of the year and a holiday for me. What luck! I decided to withdraw some money from the bank, The bank person, an elderly gentleman with a white beard, replied indifferently as usual to my polite “Happy New Year.” He nodded and I sat in front of him.

Minutes passed but he didn’t raise his head.

Then very hesitantly I put my form and booklet in front of him. He was busy filling up entries in his register. After a few minutes he took my form and from his cabinet he took out a very thick file, from which he started filling in my details, I sat there wondering why we had computerized banking if we were still filling in forms and register.

After waiting for a few more minutes, in which I showed all signs of being impatient, I asked him if my work was done. The moment I said the words, I felt as if a bomb had fallen on him. He shouted, “Nothing is done, it will take time!”

Just then I saw his morning cup of tea which had been lying there for the last ten minutes, untouched. The tea had tuned almost cold while he was doing his work. Suddenly I felt what this man, who had been working at this counter for the last God-knows-how-many years, must be feeling when customers like me come who are always in a hurry to get their work done. We do not even feel the need to thank them for being there, He must be feeling so anxious that “here comes another person who will push me for doing his work first.”

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

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Thinking of this, I told him, “Sir, you please hare your tea, I am not in a hurry.”

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What he said really touched my heart.

#范文

Para.1:

Thinking of this, I told him, “Sir, you please have your tea, I am not in a hurry.” This gentleman, who had worked in the bank for so many years, suddenly looked up at me and for the first time we had eye contact—he had never made eye contact earlier. I saw a different person there. He gave me a rare smile and said, “It is an everyday affair with me; you are not in a hurry but somebody else will come who will be in a hurry.”

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What he said really touched my heart. I felt that all this time I thought of him as a robot, someone who was there for my convenience, but today I suddenly felt a strange bond with him. I promised to be more friendly with people who help me with my work and be thankful that they are there for me. In our life, we need to put ourselves in other people’s shoes to imagine their thoughts. In this way, we can understand others better.

【解析】

通过阅读所给文章可知， 作者在去银行取钱的时候，遇到银行一位上了年纪的白胡子绅士。作者等了几分钟感觉不耐烦，然后看到了他早上喝的那杯茶，已经放了十分钟了，一动也不动。于是换位思考了对方的感受。

续写部分分为两段，第一段开头是：想到这里，我对他说:“先生，请您用茶吧，我不赶时间。”。所以后文应该是讲述听到作者的话后，这位在银行工作了这么多年的先生突然抬头看着我，我们第一次有了眼神交流——他之前从未有过这样的交流。第二段开头是：他的话真的触动了我的心。接着应当写作者的感悟，突然感到与他之间有一种奇怪的纽带。我承诺对帮助自己工作的人更加友好，并感谢他们一直支持自己。在我们的生活中，我们需要设身处地为别人着想，想象他们的想法。

续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度，我们要熟悉所给划线词语，恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右；续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。

【范文点评】

本文描写详略得当，使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如：look up at，eye contact，help with等高级词汇；定语从句This gentleman, who had worked in the bank for so many years, suddenly looked up at me and for the first time we had eye contact—he had never made eye contact earlier.；主语从句What he said really touched my heart.等高级句式。

#写作演练二

2.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。

When I spent the last summer with my Grandmother in Warwick, N.Y., she sent me down to the grocery store with a long shopping list. Staring at all the items on the list, I wondered how I could find anything on the packed shelves around me. But she insisted.

I walked up to the counter. Behind it was a lady like no one I’d ever seen. Thick glasses rested on the tip of her nose, gray hair was piled on her head.

“Excuse me,” I said. She looked up.

“You’re that Clements kid,” she said. “I’m Miss Bee. Come closer and let me get a look at you.” She pushed her glasses up her nose. “I want to be able to describe you to the policeman if something goes missing from the store.”

“I’m not a thief!” I was shocked. I was too young to be a thief!

“Maybe not, but I can tell you’ve got potential.” She went back to reading her newspaper.

“I need to get these.” I said, holding up my list.

“So? Go get them.” She ignored my need of a favor, “There’s no one here except you and me and I’m not your servant, so I suggest you start looking for the things on that list.”

The store was a puzzle to a seven-year-old, and it seemed to hold all the goods in the world. I complained about this task Grandma had set me to do while trying to find all the items on my list. It took me one and half an hour to do it, and the mean lady behind the counter didn’t even bother to look at me once.

I visited Miss Bee a couple of times a week that summer. Sometimes she sold me an old newspaper instead of one that was the latest. Sometimes she overcharged me and didn’t seem embarrassed when I pointed it out. Going to the store was more like going into battle, but I survived. By summer’s end the shopping trip that had once taken me an hour was done in 15 minutes. The morning I was to return to Brooklyn, I stopped in to get a soda.

Para. 1:

“All right, Miss Potential, what did you learn this summer?” she said.

Para. 2:

One day after all those years my seven-year-old daughter came to me with homework troubles.

#范文

“All right, Miss Potential, what did you learn this summer?” she said. “That you’re mean!” Finally I said it, thinking that I didn’t have to deal with her again. To my amazement, Miss Bee laughed. “I know what you think of me,” she continued “Well, I don’t care! Each of us is put on this earth for a reason. I believe my job is to teach every child I meet some life lessons to help them.” Embarrassed as I felt, I wasn’t capable of appreciating the lessons she claimed she had given me at such a young age, and I only wished that I had never met her. After checking out, I left.

One day after all those years my seven-year-old daughter came to me with homework troubles. “It’s too hard,” she complained. “Could you finish my math problems for me?” “If I do it for you how will you ever learn to do it yourself?” I responded. Suddenly, I was back at the grocery store where I had learned the hard way to deal with my own business. Had I ever been overcharged since? As my daughter went back to her homework, I wondered: Had Miss Bee really taught me something all those years ago? Sure enough, she didn’t act as a servant but she inspired potential in a seven-year-old.

【解析】

短文叙述了作者七岁时，祖母列出了采购的清单，让作者独自去购买采购清单上的物品，而商店的女店主对待作者一点也不友好，她甚至怀疑作者是小偷，不帮助作者选购商品，让作者独自去采购，而那个夏天作者多次去那里购物，而这位女店主，不是多收她钱，就是卖给作者过期的报纸，在这里购物如同战争一样，不过作者都能成功的应付。一天早上，作者又去了这家商店……续写由此开始。

第一段续写以“All right, Miss Potential, what did you learn this summer?” she said.开始，这时要着重续写，女店主与作者的对话，女店主说了什么，作者是怎么想的。第二段续写以One day after all those years my seven-year-old daughter came to me with homework troubles.开使，本段承接第一段续写，这段要着重续写作者与女儿之间的对话，女儿说了什么，作者突然间思绪回到了当年去杂货店买东西的时候，作者意识到了当年女店主Miss Bee激发了自己的潜能。续写的词数应为150左右。

【范文点评】

文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式：as 引导的让步状语从句和wish的虚拟语气Embarrassed as I felt, I wasn’t capable of appreciating the lessons she claimed she had given me at such a young age, and I only wished that I had never met her. After checking out, I left. where引导的定语从句Suddenly, I was back at the grocery store where I had learned the hard way to deal with my own business.高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。