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鹊桥仙 谢宇轩 - 鹊桥仙
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鹊桥仙 徐千雅 - 鹊桥仙
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正值七夕来临之际，林苑君借此机会，祝尚未找到爱情的朋友，有情人终成眷属；祝在恋爱或婚姻中的朋友，爱情、婚姻更加幸福美满。感谢各位一路以来对《林苑》微信公众号的关注和支持。
秦观（1049—1100）
《鹊桥仙·纤云弄巧》，一首咏七夕之节序词，为宋代词人秦观所作。该词以牛郎织女悲欢离合的神话故事为叙事蓝本，颂赞纯洁、细腻、真挚、坚贞的爱情。纵观全词，每阕前三句皆为写景抒情，铺垫精彩，后两句均作评论，自然流出，真挚深沉。上阕描写牛郎织女聚会场景，下阕述评离别之景。全词悲欢交织，夹抒夹议，天地相通，意象优美，情感深沉，情节跌宕起伏，赞颂美好爱情。全词语言优美、立意高远、用情深挚；叙评通俗易懂，自由流畅，却又不失婉约蕴藉，余味无穷，特别是词末二句“两情若是久长时，又岂在朝朝暮暮”，使全词思想境界升华至一个崭新的高度，成为爱情颂歌中流传甚广的千古佳句。词人秦观借此两句向世人揭示了爱情的真谛：距离和时间是检验爱情的唯一标准。只要双方彼此爱慕，坦诚相爱，纵使常年天各一方，相比庸俗情趣的朝夕相伴更加难能可贵。故此，明人李攀龙《草堂诗余隽》卷三眉批给予高度评价：“相逢胜人间，会心之语。两情不在朝暮，破格之谈。七夕歌以双星会少别多为恨，独少游此词谓‘两情若是久长’二句，最能醒人心目。”
截止目前，小编所搜集到的可读性强的英文译本有16个，译者分别为许景城、许渊冲、赵彦春、卓振英、张畅繁、黄新渠、张智中、初大告、朱曼华、曾冲明、徐忠杰、黄宏荃、宇文所安、谢艳明、李正栓、赵宜忠。所选译本，不分优劣，按收集获取时间先后排序，可供课堂教学及相关学术研究。小编也邀请了班戈大学历史学院研究员주의돈(朱義暾)博士将此词译成韩文。
世上无完美译文。所选译文既有优点亦有瑕疵。不同角度切入，得出的结论自然也不一样。优点和瑕疵随着角度的变化而相互转化(此观点基于的前提是译本本身是佳译或可读性强)：瑕疵变成优点，反之亦然。《林苑》公众号历来秉承‘不厚此薄彼’的优良传统美德。故此，希望大家都应该对每个译本的不足之处，持公正、客观、思辨的态度，并以平常心、宽容心来对待。各个译本是如何英译“纤云”、“传恨”、“胜却”、“佳期如梦”、“忍顾”、“两情若是久长时，又岂在朝朝暮暮”等等词句？具体细节处，还望读者自析自赏。欢迎读者在文后留言区内留言，对自己喜爱或觉得有待改进的译本进行析读。
鹊桥仙 褚海辰 - 鹊桥仙
- 多版本译文 -
- 译文1 -
The Magpie-Bridge Lore
By Qin Guan
Tr. Peter Jingcheng Xu (许景城 译)
Clouds fine like art,
stars flying with rue,
the Cowherd is inching across the Milky Way.
When the Golden Breeze meets with the Jade Dew,
it wanes all romances on earth in play.
Love like streams soft,
Date like dreams due,
Magpie Bridge sees them homeward reluctant to part away.
Were mutual love to last for good and true,
why should they conjoin always night and day?
注：
（1）译文中“due”实为三关语。一指“应得的、预期的”，牛郎织女预见相逢佳期终临；二指“适当的”，其相逢正当时，恰是佳期；三指“到期的”，其短暂佳期终将结束，离别又将开始。此三关构成一个无限内循环意义体系，即“相逢预期——相逢之时——相逢到期”，呈现出牛郎织女以及读者在“翘望、赏望、怅望”无限循环中对待七夕相会。
（2）原词上下片各两仄韵，一韵到底，即/en/、/u/，译文大体以二韵/u:/、/ei/对应。译文与原文押韵格式基本一致。
译于白云山麓广外
2019-7-31
福州书法爱好者蔡铁勇先生中英文书法
韩文译本：
오작교이야기
진관지음
한국어번역주의돈(朱義暾)
그림과같은고운구름
후회를안고날아가는별들
견우는은하수를건너고있네
금빛바람이옥빛이슬을만날때
세상의모든사랑이야기는시들해지네
사랑은부드러운강물같고
만남은꿈과같네
그들은아쉬워하며오작교를떠나서집으로향하네
서로를향한진실한사랑이영원하다면
그들이 항상 밤낮으로 함께 할 필요는 없다네
- 译文2 -
Immortal at the Magpie Bridge
Qin Guan
许渊冲 译
Clouds float like works of art;
Stars shoot with grief at heart.
Across the Milky Way the Cowherd meets the Maid.
When autumn's Golden Wind embraces Dew of Jade,
All the love scenes on earth, however many, fade.
Their tender love flows like a stream;
This happy date seems but a dream.
Can they bear a separate homeward way?
If love between both sides can last for aye,
Why need they stay together night and day?
- 译文3 -
The Magpie Bridge Immortal
Qin Guan
赵彦春 译
A cloud plays, shown her art;
A star shoots, grieved his heart.
To steal o’er Silver River they start.
Once golden wind encounters dew impearled,
All loves are eclipsed in the mortal world.
Their love purls as a stream;
Their tryst is like a dream.
To Magpie Bridge, their eyes sadly gleam.
If two hearts can remain steadfast for aye,
Why need they keep together night and day?
- 译文4 -
Immortals on the Magpie Bridge
卓振英 译
Her love into th' clouds the Maid subtly weaves,
And th' shooting stars display how th' Cowherd grieves.
When dew falls the Milky Way sees their meeting rare.
However, no secular love can e'er compare
With the holy sentiments they for a time share.
Their tender feeling is like a long stream;
Their rendezvous's like a transient dream.
They may not bear to part at th' MagpieBridge! But nay,
So long as undying their affections will stay,
Whereat should they be bound up every night and day?
注：This tune name derives from the myth of the sincere love between the Cowboy (Niulang) and the Weaver (Zhinu), who are separated by the Heavenly Queen with the Milky Way and allowed to meet only once in a year at the bridge built by the magpies which sympathize with them.
- 译文5 -
Magpie Bridge
Tune: Que Qiao Xian
By Qin Guan
Tr. E.C.Chang (张畅繁 译)
Fine clouds show their artistic faces.
Blinking stars convey their grief in space.
So wide and dim to go across the Milky Way!
Meeting once a year in autumn is surely sweeter
than numerous earthly reunions on any given day.
Their feelings are as tender as water;
their annual date is like a dream forever.
On the magpie bridge, how can they bear
to turn homeward one more time?
If mutual love will last and never die,
why need to be together day and night?
- 译文6 -
Immortal at Magpie Bridge
Qin Guan
黄新渠 译
Fine clouds float easy and free,
Shooting stars shine with sorrow.
They enjoy a secret date once a year over the far-off Milky Way.
As fall wind hugs the chill dew,
They outshine all worldly dates.
Their tender love flows like a stream,
Their nice date is but a fancy dream.
How can they bear to go each one's way homeward?
If the love for each other goes on as ever,
Why need they stay together day and night?
- 译文7 -
Immortals at Magpie Bridge
Qin Guan
张智中 译
The changing of flimsy clouds
is irregular and artful;
the shooting stars are pouring out
their missing and yearning.
Stealthily across the Silver River
the Cowherd meets the Weaving Girl.
A single annual meeting in the seventh
evening of the seventh month amidst
golden autumn wind & jade-glistening
dew puts to shame countless couples
in the mortal world.
Water-like tender feelings,
dreamy ecstatic tryst, at parting
how can they bear to look back
at the Magpie Bridge?
So long as two sweet hearts
are forever fondly in love,
why in the company of each other
from sweet morning to sweet
evening and from sweet evening
to sweet morning?
- 译文8 -
The Seventh Night of the Seventh Moon
Qin Guan
初大告 译
(Herd Boy)
The soft clouds make decorations,
The shooting stars play harbinger, –
Far across the Silver River you secretly come to me.
Though only once a year we meet in the time of sharp wind and chill dew,
We are many times happier than the lovers on earth.
(Weaving Girl)
Our feelings are tender as water,
Our meeting is sweeter than a dream;
It is hard for me to look back on the homeward path from the Blackbirds Bridge.
But if our love for each other will long endure,
It makes no difference that we do not live together day and night.
- 译文9 -
To the Melody
Chin Guan
朱曼华 译
The Weaving-Girl with skillful fingers is clever,
As if gentle clouds were flying faster and faster.
Silently the Cowboy-Star crossed the Milky Way,
For releasing her grief on the Double-Seventh-Day*,
Like Golden Wind and Jade Dew merged once again.
No meeting was happier than the couple's reunion.
Their water-like tenderness was pretty warm,
Their reunion date's like a wonderful dream.
Weaving-Girl and Cowboy were reluctant to be apart,
The two heavenly stars knew true love would ever last,
Regardless of their mutual separation day and night.
* Chinese Double-Seventh-Day is similar to the Valentine's Day in the West.
- 译文10 -
Meeting at Magpie Bridge
曾冲明 译
A few clouds play still in the sky bright;
Stars twinkle to send love likely with griefs.
The cowboy and the sewer-girl meet tonight
In the Milky Way and during the golden autumn.
Their meeting once a year is far better
Than living together always on earth.
Their love is as tender as water；
Their meeting as short as a dream.
They fear to think of their new separation.
But if their love lasts long and forever，
Why should they live always together?
- 译文11 -
Queqiaoxian
Qin Guan
徐忠杰 译
Clouds have their peculiar flair and skill;
They can change their size and shape, as they will.
Stars have qualities more wonderful still;
The hopes of their fellows, they can fulfill,
In those celestial regions, high above,
As links for one star to approach her love,
They help 'Lassie' to cross the Milky Way,
To see her 'Laddie' once a year, this day.
Their love is like heavenly dew for gods to drink.
To the human level, it would never sink.
One rendezvous between them is of more worth –
Than countless such as we have on this, our earth.
Their love is constant, as water is, in its flow.
Their lover's meeting is short, as sweet dreams go.
How she bears the sight of Magpie Bridge without a tear,
Which marks their separation for another year!
Since their affection is something that endure,
Must they bill andcoo as daily renewer?
- 译文12 -
Que Qiao Xian
Qin Guan
黄宏荃 译
The fleecy clouds affect patterns delicate;
The flying stars communicate their grief e'er so deep,
Crossing the expansive Milky Way they meet.
Alas! That single meet amid celestial winds and dews
Surpasses countless meets on earth.
Sweet tenderness overflows their hearts,
Short rendezvous passes like a dream:
Mournfully she contemplates her homeward way
Across the magpie-bridge!
Yet if two hearts are ever steadfast,
Though parted, they are together
Night and day!
- 译文13 -
To 'Gods on the Magpie Bridge'
Qin Guan
Stephen Owen 宇文所安 译
Fine wisps of cloud sport their craft,
shooting stars bear word of the lovers' pain,
and now far off in the River of Stars
they are making the crossing unseen.
To meet just once in fall's metal wind
and in the jade white dew
turns out to be better by far
than the countless meetings of mortals.
Their tender feelings seem like water,
this sweet moment is as in dream
how can they bear to turn their heads
to the path leading back over Magpie Bridge ?
But so long as both of them love
and so long as their love lasts on,
it does not need to be done
every night and every morning at dawn.
- 译文14 -
Fiber-like Cloud: To the Tune of the Immortal Magpies' Bridge
Qin Guan
谢艳明 译
Fiber-like cloud displays her art;
Flying stars pass their yearning rue.
They steal across the Milky Way far apart,
And meet in the gold wind and jade-like dew,
Surpassing all lovers on the mortal part.
Their tender love is like water clear,
This happy date seems to be a dream.
Parting, they look at the way back in tear.
If love between two sides last forever, they deem,
Why need they stay together day and night, so dear?
- 译文15 -
Immortals at Magpie Bridge
Qin Guan
李正栓 译
Fanciful clouds float and go;
Stars convey feeling of woe.
Cowherd and the Maid cross the Milky Way on the sly.
Once the Golden Wind and the Jade Dew meet,
It's better than countless human dating under the sky.
Tender is their feeling;
Their rendezvous is fleeting.
From Magpie Bridge how can they bear to return?
If two love alike and live long,
Is there need to cling to each eve and morn?
- 译文16 -
Immortals on the Magpie Bridge
Qin Guan
赵宜忠 译
The fiber-like clouds in the sky reveal their art，
But the meteors pass the lovesickness and the hate,
The cowherd crossed over the milky way at night.
Meeting once in pear-like dewdrops and golden wind,
Outnumbers the countless times in the mortal world.
Their love is as tender as water of a stream，
But their date of the tryst is just like a short dream，
They endure to see the way from the bridge back home.
If the love between two persons lasts for for good，
To stay together night and day,why do they need?
(With 12 syllables per line and rhyme aaabb cccbb）
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