【雅思作文真题直击·第3期】8月27日雅思写作大作文解析及范文

雅思作文题目

Some people think it is more important to plant trees in open areas in towns and cities than to provide more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

解析

本题问：在城镇空地，该种树还是该建房？可能很多学生会直接回答：当然应该种树！原因是种树可以让环境更好更美，还可以让人们的身体更加健康。这个答案自然是可以的，但若只写种树的优势，恐怕就无法顾及讨论建房的优势了。然而，我们知道，如果一个城镇无法为其居民提供足够的住房，也是很有问题的。因此，从这个意义上，我们可以分别讨论种树的条件和优势，以及建房的条件和优势，然后得出结论：在住房条件已经满足的情况下，应该种树；但若住房不够，城镇空地还是应该建房以满足人们的现实需要。

那么，破解这个题目的关键就在于区分不同的城镇。有些城镇已经有足够多的住房，这些城镇的空地应该植树，而对于那些住房不足的城镇，建房显然应该是最佳选择。在解析8月20日雅思作文真题“慈善机构应该只帮助自己国家的人还是应该帮助其他国家的人”时，唐老师提出，要善于在雅思作文题目中寻找“破题点”，即将题目中的关键词分解成不同情况分别加以讨论。比如，8月20日的雅思作文，关键就是将“慈善机构”进行分类：有着眼于地方问题的慈善机构，也有着眼于全球问题的慈善机构，不同的机构，其基金流向就不同。这样讨论，就显得言之有物，逻辑清楚。

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8月20日雅思大作文的解析

7分范文

Many people suggest that there should be more trees rather than houses in the open areas of cities and towns. While this suggestion is reasonable in many cases, it is not so in others.

For a city or town which has already had sufficient supply of housing, planting trees in the open areas is certainly a good idea. With green trees covering the streets, the city look much more beautiful. That is why I prefer living in southern cities where green trees are everywhere even in winter to living in northern cities. At the same time, more trees make the city air cleaner, because as we all know, trees take in carbon dioxide and release oxygen, which is beneficial to the health of the city dwellers. Statistics show that people living in a tree-covered city enjoy much higher life expectancy than those living within the concrete walls of tall buildings.

Yet, it would be stupid to ask people to plant trees in a city or town where they can not find enough houses to live in. Planting trees is undoubtedly more environmentally friendly, but getting a shelter to keep off rain and wind is always the top concern for all people. 30 years ago, in many cities and towns in China, for example, numerous houses were built as the urbanisation attracted a large number of people into the city. People did not focus on planting trees back then, not that they did not understand the importance of a healthy environment, but that they found they should put survival at the top of their agenda.

There is no definite answer, therefore, to the question whether we should plant trees or build houses in the open areas of a city, because the answer is dependent on how developed the city is. In a highly developed city, planting trees is always a better choice, yet in a less developed city, houses are more needed than trees.

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老师笔记

Many people suggest that there should be more trees rather than houses in the open areas of cities and towns. While this suggestion is reasonable in many cases, it is not so in others.

1. 开头段，直接重述题目观点，然后给出自己的观点。注意体会唐老师如何对题目进行重新表述。在雅思考试中，如果全文照抄题目原话，容易给考官一个印象，认为你不具备改写能力。
2. while 这个词尤其灵活，请各位烤鸭务必掌握其细微的用法。

For a city or town which has already had sufficient supply of housing, planting trees in the open areas is certainly a good idea. With green trees covering the streets, the city look much more beautiful. That is why I prefer living in southern cities where green trees are everywhere even in winter to living in northern cities. At the same time, more trees make the city air cleaner, because as we all know, trees take in carbon dioxide and release oxygen, which is beneficial to the health of the city dwellers. Statistics show that people living in a tree-covered city enjoy much higher life expectancy than those living within the concrete walls of tall buildings.

1. 本段讲种树在什么情况下是合理的，以及为什么要种树。这里提出了两个理由：一，种树可以让城镇更美丽；二，种树可以使人们身体更健康。
2. With green trees covering the streets = if green trees cover the streets = if the streets are covered by green trees. 这是一种很地道的独立结构，这里用来替换过度使用的if从句。练习用with引导的独立结构，可以丰富我们的句式。
3. Statistics show that...统计数据表明......

Yet, it would be stupid to ask people to plant trees in a city or town where they can not find enough houses to live in. Planting trees is undoubtedly more environmentally friendly, but getting a shelter to keep off rain and snow is always the top concern for all people. 30 years ago, in many cities and towns in China, for example, many houses were built as the urbanisation attracted a large number of people into the city. People did not focus on planting trees back then, not that they did not understand the importance of a healthy environment, but that they found they should put survival at the top of their agenda.

1. 本段讲在某些情况下，比如当城镇居民无楼可住的时候，种树并不是人们的最佳选择。然后用中国30年的情况作为例证。
2. ...not that..., but that... 不是因为，而是因为
3. Put...at the top of agenda 把......置于议程之首；最先考虑......

There is no definite answer, therefore, to the question whether we should plant trees or build houses in the open areas of a city, because the answer is dependent on how developed the city is. In a highly developed city, planting trees is always a better choice, yet in a less developed city, houses are more needed than trees.

1. 结论段：到底该种树还是建房取决于城市的发展程度。在结论段，我们也要避免与前面部分表达重复。
2. ... Is dependent on... = depend on... 取决于......

参考译文

许多人建议在城镇的空地，应该有更多的树，而不是更多房子。这个建议在很多情况下都是合理的，但在另外一些情况下则不竟然。

对于一个住房供应已经很充足的城镇，在空地植树当然是一个好想法。当绿树覆盖街道，城市显得更加美丽。这就是我为什么宁愿住在南方城市而不是北方城市的原因，因为南方城市到处都有绿树，即使冬天也如此。同时，更多树木让城市的空气更加清洁，因为如我们所知，树木吸收二氧化碳，释放氧气，这对城市居民的身体健康有好处。统计数据显示，住在绿树覆盖的城市，比住在高楼的钢筋墙内，人们的期待寿命要高得多。

然而，如果一个城市住房都不够，却要求人们去植树，这是很愚蠢的。毫无疑问，植树对环境更有利，但是找个遮风避雨的地方对所有人来说都是首先需要考虑的。比如，30年前，中国很多城镇都建了数不清的房子，因为城镇化吸引了大批人群进入城市。那时，人们不太关注植树，并不是因为他们不明白健康环境的重要性，而是因为他们发现，应该优先考虑生存问题。

因此，在城镇空地该植树还是该建房，这个问题没有确切的答案，因为答案取决于这个城市的发展状况。在高度发达的城市，植树多半都是更好的选择，但在不太发达的城市里，房子比树木更加需要。

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