2021年1月八省联考英语【应用文写作 读后续写】解读及优秀范文

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题目：应用文写作（满分15分）

假定你是李华，准备参加学校组织的英文诗朗诵比赛。请给外教George写封邮件求助，内容包括：

1. 说明比赛要求；

2. 请他推荐英文诗；

3. 请教朗诵技巧。

注意：

1. 写作词数应为80左右；

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Dear Mr. George,

I’m writing to ask for your help.

________________________________

Yours,

Li Hua

  题型解读  

应用文写作主要考查学生英语语言的实际应用能力，该题型写作目的明确，测试学生在实际生活情景下运用英语传达信息、表达观点的能力，题目侧重英语语言的交际性和实用性。应用文写作文体以书信（邮件）类为主，这类应用文通常出现提纲式要点，话题常与学生的校园生活相关。此次八省联考英语写作部分第一题应用文写作考查的方向是求助信。这对学生作文训练的全面性和灵活性是一个挑战。

  推荐词汇和句型  

求助信是向对方求助，所以言辞要诚恳，如实说出自己的现状以及求助内容，一般分为三个部分，即说明写信目的、描述所遇问题、表达期望。其中“写信目的”和“表达期望”可以使用如下的一些常用句式进行展开：

【写信目的】

1. I’m writing to ask for your help.

我写信的目的是寻求你的帮助。

2. I wonder if you can offer me some tips on… .

我想知道你能否给我一些关于……的建议。

3. I am writing in the hope that you can give me some advice on…

我写信是希望你能给我一些关于……的建议。

4. Would you be kind enough to give me a hand with the following problems?

你能帮我解决下面的问题吗?

【表达期望】

1. I’d appreciate it if you could give me some guidance.

如果你能给我一些指导，我会很感激的。

2. I am eager to get your timely help.

我渴望得到你及时的帮助。

3. I will be grateful if you can spare time to give me a hand.

如果你能抽出时间帮助我，我将不胜感激。

  优秀范文  

Dear Mr. George,

I’m writing to ask for your help.

I am eager to enter for the English Poetry Declamation Contest our school will be holding next weekend. The theme must be related to nature. Each competitor will be given five minutes to read. Would you please be so kind as to give me some recommendations for poems? If it’s not too much to ask, could I also ask you for tips to polish my performance? Any advice on declamation, including pronunciation and intonation, would be helpful.

I’d appreciate it if you could give me some guidance. Looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

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题目：读后续写（满分25分）

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

During this past year, I’ve had three instances of car trouble. Each time these things happened, I was sick of the way most people hadn’t bothered to help. One of those times, I was on the side of the road for close to three hours with my big Jeep. I put signs in the windows, big signs that said NEED A JACK（千斤顶）, and offered money. Nothing. Right as I was about to give up, a Mexican family in a small truck pulled over, and the father bounded out.

He sized up the situation and called for his daughter, who spoke English. He conveyed through her that he had a jack but that it was too small for the Jeep, so we would need something to support it. Then he got a saw（锯子）from the truck and cut a section out of a big log on the side of the road. We rolled it over and put his jack on top, and we were in business.

I started taking the wheel off, and then, if you can believe it, I broke his tire iron. No worries: He handed it to his wife, and she was gone in a flash down the road to buy a new tire iron. She was back in 15 minutes. We finished the job, and I was a very happy man.

The two of us were dirty and sweaty. His wife prepared a pot of water for us to wash our hands. I tried to put a $20 bill in the man’s hand, but he wouldn’t take it, so instead I went up to the truck and gave it to his wife as quietly as I could. I asked the little girl where they lived. Mexico, she said. They were in Oregon so Mommy and Daddy could work on a fruit farm for the next few weeks. Then they would go home.

注意：

1. 续写词数应为150左右；

2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.

__________________________

After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.

___________________________

  题型解读  

读后续写作为新高考英语的创新题型出现，主要考查学生对英语的综合运用能力和创新性思维能力。具体而言，读后续写要求考生在给定的时间内读懂原文，并能把握原文的关键信息和语言特点；在续写部分做到想象合理，衔接连贯，内容饱满；在语言应用上，强调语言使用的丰富性和准确性，要求考生灵活使用高级词汇和复杂句式。在行文逻辑方面，要求考生进行合理的想象，并恰当地使用一定的衔接手段，使行文连贯。

  续写思路分析：

通过梳理故事的情感线和剧情线，可以得出如下的思维导图：

  优秀范文1  

When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.My gut feeling was to refuse. But my stomach was growling since I hadn’t eaten for more than four hours. Seeing my embarrassment, the girl just pressed some bread into my hands and changed the subject to talk about my car. After the seemingly simple meal which pulled us closer together, the family was ready to leave. When the father started his truck, the little angel handed me a paper bag, then waved goodbye to me. I stood and watched the truck until it vanished around a turn.

After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.The fruit inside didn’t look perfect, but the tantalizing aroma filled the air. Picking one up to take a big bite, I found a $20 bill in the bag. Recalling their sincere eyes and smiles while chewing the juicy fruit, I felt the warmth flowing into my heart. Certainly, I’ve encountered many indifferent people and I’ve experienced some helpless moments, but I still put my trust in this beautiful world. Because I finally realized one thing that stands the brunt of life throughout its course: a kind heart. (177 words)

  出彩表达积累  

1. gut adj. 本能的

2. growl v. 低声吼叫

3. vanish v. 突然消失

4. tantalize v. 逗引，招惹

5. aroma n. 芳香；香味

6. indifferent adj. 漠不关心

7. stand the brunt of sth. 首当其冲

8. When the father started his truck, the little angel handed me a paper bag, then waved goodbye to me.

当那位父亲发动他的卡车时，小天使递给我一个纸袋，然后向我挥手告别。（对动作的生动描写）

9. Recalling their sincere eyes and smiles while chewing the juicy fruit, I felt the warmth flowing into my heart.

咀嚼着多汁的水果，回忆着他们真诚的眼神和微笑，我感到温暖流进了我的心里。（对神态的生动描写）

  优秀范文2  

When I was about to say goodbye, the girl asked if I’d had lunch.Before I could speak, my stomach answered in a delighted grumble. After ages of hopelessly waiting and an hour of hard work, my body was desperate for fuel. The girl giggled and led me to their truck. There I saw a small portable table. I must have said “thank you” a thousand times during the meal. The father simply smiled and patted my shoulder. His wife gestured to the dishes. “This one good?” she asked. And then I was handed a paper bag filled with Mexican delicacies.

After they left, I got into my Jeep and opened the paper bag.Lying on top of the food was my $20 bill. I immediately looked around for the truck, but it was long gone. Since then, each time I drove past a fruit farm, I would look for a small truck and the family with a heart of gold. But weeks passed with fruitless searches. In the meantime, I began to help travelers with car problems, all for free. I stopped whining and seized every chance to pass on kindness; kindness I hope will reach these good people one day. (175 words)

  出彩表达积累  

1. grumble n. 咕隆声；隆隆声

2. giggle v. （因感到有趣、窘迫或紧张而）咯咯地笑；傻笑

3. portable adj. 便携式的；轻便的

4. pat v. （喜爱地）轻拍

5. gesture v. 做手势；用动作示意

6. delicacy n. 精美的食物；佳肴

7. whine v. 哭哭啼啼；哭嚷

8. a heart of gold  善良的心

9. Before I could speak, my stomach answered in a delighted grumble.

我还没开口，我的肚子用开心的咕隆声作了回答。（拟人的生动描写）

10. After ages of hopelessly waiting and an hour of hard work, my body was desperate for fuel.

经过长久的无望等待以及一小时的辛苦工作，我的身体极度需要补充能量。（夸张和比喻的生动描写）